I personally like it, There are some things that could be cut so its just to the points needed, such as "our way of life". Also the "looking to attack a member for a legitimate reason" as most if not all the information there is provided in "GHS attacked you". You could also just say contact diplomat for ct's, I have been giving gallie names for her list or taken from her list and giving to those requested since ive been diplomat and I dont mind. Its not as complicated of a process for the potential recruit if we have all the information right there rather then links.